Before the response of my review was posted, I conversated with my friend, Kristie Green. Considering the nature of my response, I'm *very* mild compared to Kristie! ^^; Believe me, Kristie lets it all hang out in this one! Moshi: o.O Tory: Hentai, Mo-chan... Moshi: (*^_^*) Usagi: She's been around Hino-ojii again! Rei: NANI!? Note: If some of the comments look different, that's because I'd sent Kristie the rough draft version. > >Lilith: Overall, a good profile. Next! Kristie: This is obviously a nit-picking session, otherwise the good aspects of the profile would have been pointed out. What was good about it? The stats? Her history? The attacks and transformation? WHAT!? All we get, however, is a "Next!" **facefaults** Erika: Easy, Kre-chan. You're only commenting on comments, remember? Kristie: **huff** **growl** > >Solar: The fanfic itself. It's a good fic, with a developed > >storyline and lots of twists in the plot and all. I liked > >the part where Moshi thought she was Rei, and all that stuff > >happened. Kristie: "all that stuff happened." WHAT STUFF!?!? My comments from above stand. And, I'm not asking for a plot summary, but they/she could have pointed out a couple of specific things. Erika: Down girl... > Minako: Hear that? Stuff happened. Never mind the fact that >Moshi was prancing around dressed as Sailormars. > Moshi: Speaking of which, those heels were killers! How do you >do that?! > Rei: It takes skill. Kristie: **grin** Oh yeah. I remember walking around in heels on my wedding day... augh. Never again. Karin: Thank you for not putting us in heeled boots. Kristie: No problem. I'd be too worried about twisted ankles, and with Trina and all... Trina: Huh? What about me? Karin: Nothing. Go back to daydreaming. Trina: I'm not daydreaming!! Kristie: Alright, shut up, let's continue. > >Lilith: One thing that really really annoyed me, though, is > >the constant use of Japanese. > > Ami: We are Japanese. > Tory: Ami-chan, don't start. Kristie: This is truly a "duh" moment for the reviewers. Karin and Erika: **giggle** --snip-- > Rei: Anyone smell the odor of pants burning? > Makoto: I'll say. Where's the air freshner?! Kristie: **cracks up** Trina: Why was that funny? Erika: Y'know, liar liar pants on fire? Trina: Oh. .... They didn't say that, though. Karin: Continue, please. > >Lilith: Ohh. Weird. Also, another thing I noticed is this: > >since when do people spit blood clots out their mouth and nose > >if their arm gets cut off? ALL: EH!? Kristie: That's not how I remember it happening... Erika: That's because it didn't happen that way, genius. Kristie: -_- > >Solar: Eew. Yeah, you're right about that. The excessive > >spitting of blood clots is almost as bad as the excessive > >Japanese. Karin: Excessive blood clot spitting? Um, is it just me, or was there only one scene that really had that in it? Erika: No, you're right. > >Lilith: And what's up with the Moshi/Hoshi dialogue on the > >phone? It suddenly goes to some weird format with "Moshi: > >'Hi.' Hoshi: 'Hi.'" and stuff like that. Kristie: SO!? Have you ever listened in on a conversation between two teenagers!? That's about the extent of it!! If anything, it's a hell of a lot more accurate than some deep philosophical analysis of Moshi's hair bow!! And to top it off, another "weird format" comment!! AUGH!!! Karin: HEY!!! We gonna have to muzzle you, woman? Kristie: **sweatdrop** sorry... > >Solar: Like a script almost, but if it was a script, it's > >not in the right format. I don't know what was up there. Kristie: Don't EVEN get me going on formatting, kids. **brandishes MLA Guide** I majored - and HAVE a BA - in English - I think I'm more than qualified to rip people to shreds over their horrible formatting choices. The thing is, this formatting comment is coming from the same person who has a love affair with the
command. -_-;; Erika: Oh lord... --snip-- > >Lilith: And if it's between S and SS, then the Outers should be > >there right? But they're not! Kristie: Thank god... ALL: SHUT UP!!! Kristie: **sweatdrop** --snip-- > Tory: Yet another thing overlooked. I said I USED MANGA ATTACKS >because I didn't want to CREATE ANY NEW ONES! > Rei: It was said and they missed. Their loss. > Usagi: I'm sure Chronos Typhon would be better than Pluto Clock >Attack. > Tory: Oh gross, Usagi-chan! Kristie: **cracks up all over again** Trina: Why is that funny!? Will someone please tell me!? Karin: **giggle** no. > >Lilith: Hey, another one: Nova is supposedly out to avenge > >Galaxia's death? Um... she didn't die in the anime. Just the > >manga. > > Makoto: And now the manga experts. Good night everyone! > Tory: I never said Galaxia-sama died! > Ami: Nova thinks Galaxia is dead! > Moshi: Let's just chalk this up to something else that's gone >over their heads. Kristie: Hey, I have the manga. Erika: Yeah, maybe you should try actually reading it, Einstein. Kristie: But it's all in Japanese! Erika: And you went through all that trouble to find a translation site for what? Kristie: **facefaults** shut up. > >Solar: But look kids, the rest of it still follows the anime > continuity! Kristie: uh.. DUH!!! The anime tends to follow the manga continuity pretty well, too! **makes a loopy facial expression** Those anime people - what ripoff artists! Karin: **raises an eyebrow** Let's duct-tape her to the door frame, girls. Erika: **evil grin** --snip-- > >Lilith; Right. But other than that it's a really good fic! > >Really! It's good, except confusing and a little not > >continuous sometimes. Karin: **cracks up** Yeah!! You really suck at writing, but this is a really great fic!! Trina: Isn't that a little hypocritical? Erika: **hangs head** Trina, Trina, Trina... > >Solar: Next, the images. *goes to images section* Hey, nifty. I > >like the window popup things that come up whenever you click an > >image. > > Moshi: Amazing thing that Java script. Kristie: Actually, I don't think you even need Java script to do it... at least, I didn't think you did... O.o Erika: Once again, our resident genius at work. > >Lilith: These images - most of them anyway - are well-edited > >and/or drawn. I'm just still annoyed over the edited Usagi > >thing... Kristie: Yeah, well, I just thought I'd die Usagi's hair black for Tory-san and call it good. I won't even bring up the fact that anime/manga characters all look the same until you add hair... **rolls eyes** > >and did you notice on the card of Moshi with the > >kitten it says "Moon Princess" below her? Kristie: :\ What did I miss, here? Trina: **shrug** I dunno... Kristie: I guess I need to re-visit the gallery... Trina: Why? --snip-- > Tory: I refuse to snap. I refuse to snap. > Ami: [sighs] > Makoto: Oh boy. > Moshi: SO WHAT!? SOMEONE MADE THAT FOR HER AND TOOK TIME TO >DO IT! YOU HEARTLESS FOOLS! > Rei: You need to quit watching gaijin tv. > Moshi: Stuff it, Rei-chan. ALL: Ooooooo.... > >Solar: Very weird. Okay, we're done here. Anything at all we > >haven't covered yet, Lilith? > > Tory: Besides my corpse? Uh nope. Kristie: heh heh. > >Solar: Okay, overall impression. A good site. Sorry if we're > >being too critical, but that's just Willow nitpicking again. Kristie: THAT'S for sure! Karin: **brandishes duct-tape** > Rei: There is a difference between C&C and plain nitpicking. >This is the latter. > Ami: Did they ever email you? > Tory: Nope, not even a 'you suck' > Makoto: Isn't this the same person who wanted to use Moshi in a >storyline? > Tory: No, Mako-chan. That was Sailor Myst. > [pause] > Usagi: Nah, couldn't be! Kristie: BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAA!!!!!!! **clutches sides** > >Lilith: Not the best fanfic, mind you, but good anyway. What > >do you think, Yoake, a 2? Or a 3? > > Moshi: Or a nice big fu--MRUGHPH! > Makoto: DON'T EVEN GO THERE! Karin: **cheerleading** GO THERE!! GO THERE!! Erika: **giggle** Kristie: Who the hell is Yoake? I thought we were dealing with Sailor Lilith and Sailor Solar... wait, Solar? Erika: Don't, Kre-chan. Don't. > >Solar: 2.5. Are we allowed to rate it that? > > Minako: Now you're licensed critics?! What do you two DON'T do?! Kristie: **snort** No, I'M the licensed critic, see? **holds up BA degree accompanied by a sarcastic grin** > >Lilith: Creative expression. I think 2.5 is the appropriate > >rating. Good, but not great. > > Tory: Good, not great. Good but annoying?! Now I'm confused. > Ami: Good. Confused is good. It lessens the pain. Kristie: mmmmm. So does Motrin. The best kind of existence is a pain-free existence. **euphoric smile** Erika: O.o ... That explains a lot. Karin: **pfft** Nooooo kidding. > Tory: Ok, girls. Impressions? Ami-chan? > Ami: I think they should have taken time to read into it a bit > more. Afterall, the site has changed since *this* supposed >review. > Tory: [nods] Minako-chan? > Minako: Too many things were lost in translation. Some jokes >just 'flew' over their heads. > Tory: True, true. Usagi-chan? > Usagi: I'm still trying to figure out who Mo-chan AND Moshi is. > Aren't they the same person? > Moshi: Yes, I am. > Tory: [snickers] Mo-chan? > Moshi: What I have to say, can't be said in public. So I choose >to keep it to myself. > Tory: Uh okay. I bet in involves a lot of four lettered words. > Moshi: You betcha! > Tory: Okay, Mako-chan? > Makoto: I think that's Sailor Myst out for revenge! > [All start cracking up laughing] > Tory: Okay, Rei-chan? > Rei: I still say you should have let me flame them. > Tory: No, the insurance premimum is already sky high because of >you. > Rei: Drat! Kristie: kids? Erika: Tip numero uno. Eh-heh. ^^;; I mean, number one: Don't write a review if you're in a bad mood - this to Willow. Kristie: Excellent advice. Karin: Yeah, and really, if you can't think of suggestions for improvement, don't even start. Kristie: Again, sound advice. Comments and opinions really aren't worth listening to / reading unless the person has some valid and well thought out ideas and/or suggestions for improvement. In other words, if you can't improve upon the silence, then keep quiet. Karin: Uh, didn't I just say that? Kristie: Well.... yeah... but I just thought I'd reiterate and expand for clarity. Karin: Uh.... sure. Whatever. Kristie: **sweatdrop** Trina? Trina: **produces a soap box and promptly stands on it** "Constructive criticism" should be used and practiced with extreme care, and only with the author's permission. Rants like Willow's can NOT be called "constructive" since there was no advice offered, and no good points were focused on. This was plain out nit-picking and ripping. I'm sure that Willow would be every bit as hurt were a similar review done on her own fanfiction, thus, the cliche "People who live in glass houses shouldn't throw stones." All: O.O Karin: **shakily** Where... did that come from? And what did... SHE... do with Trina? Kristie: **every bit as stunned** I.... couldn't tell you. > And now for Tory's Rant... > > Senshi: YAY! --snip-- ALL: **cheering**