> Tory: Okay! All Inner Senshi get out! > Inners: NANI?! > Tory: You guys had the first response, now it's the > Outers turn. > [The Inners, Usagi, Ami, Rei, Minako, Makoto & Moshi leave > The Outers, Setsuna, Haruka, Michiru and Hotaru enter with > Mamoru and Hoshi following.] Karin: Hey, does this mean we have to leave too? Kristie: mmm... **consideres villains for a moment** hmmm... nah. I'm ready to do this with you three. Maybe next time. > Hoshi: [yelling back] Well, you don't have to push! > Tory: Uh, Hoshi? > Hoshi: Yeah? > Tory: You're not a Senshi. > Hoshi: I know that, but she pushed me in here! [jerks thumb > to outside] > Tory: Fine, just have a seat and lets get started. > [Everyone sits down mumbling] Dain: Women can be so difficult... Kristie: HEY! Who invited you!? I said next time! GET OUT!!! **shoves Dain out back of theater** Dain: [outside] So-rry! Jeez! Karin: **snicker** Mamoru: [from front] Are you quite finished back there!? All: **chorus** Yes! > >Disclaimer:These opinions are the opinions of SailorRiven > >(that would be me, Willow), and if you have a problem with > >this review, deal with it. > Mamoru: Gee, that's so helpful! > Setsuna: This is highly illogical. > Haruka: Can the Dr. Spock act, Setsuna! > Setsuna: [glares] The purpose of a review is to assist a > writer in making their story better. Not ripping it apart > and then telling them to *deal* with it. > Tory: [to Michiru] Is she always like this? > Michiru: If someone gets her dander up, yes. > Hotaru: Be lucky she's not transformed. She'd would've took > the theater out already. > Hoshi: [sighing] What have I mixed myself up with? Erika: Heh. It's amazing the way people start these things out. **mock voice** This is my opinion, but I'm here to force it on you, so up yours. Karin: I feel Virtual and Questionable coming on. Kristie: **groan** Please no. Tory: God, no. Kristie: **sympathetic smile** > >No really, feel free to > >flame me, > Rei: [outside] MUHAHAHAR! > Usagi: [outside] REI-CHAN, NO! > Tory: Besides, it'll be kinda hard to do with no email address. > Setsuna: [whips out laptop] Give me ten minutes. > Michiru: [takes laptop away] No, Setsuna. No evil time bombs. > Setsuna: Drat. > Hoshi: Setsuna-san's scaring me. > Hotaru: Again, be happy she's not transformed. > Hoshi: o.O;; Kristie: Heh... I might actually take her up on that... someday. >:) Erika: Ho, boy. Karin: I'll get the muzzle... > >but don't think I actually care. > Mamoru: But you care enough to do another review? Ne? > Michiru: Did she ever email you? > Tory: hmm.. Nope! And I usually keep most mail on my > Yahoo account. Erika: **laugh** Yeah right! She doesn't care one whit! Karin: Which is why she changed her whole review after Tory smacked her upside the head. Trina: Tory smacked her? K,E,K: **sweatdrop** > >These are my > >opinions, I'm not trying to force them on anyone, they're > >just my opinions. > Mamoru: As are these mine. As are these mine. Karin: Everyone got that? Erika: **giggle** > >You don't have to have the same opinions, if you do that's > >cool, if you don't that's cool too, but don't be flaming me. > Michiru: But didn't she say, go ahead, flame me? > Setsuna: Yes. [eyebrow twitch] > Haruka: But here she says, don't be flaming me! Kristie: Oh no! You don't HAVE to have the same opinions! But if you don't, you're an idiot! Trina: Didn't she just say to flame her? Karin: **listening to conversation up front** Nice job, Trina. :) Trina: **excited** Really? ^.^ > >Actually, scratch that: do flame me if you feel so inclined, > >but I won't mind. > Tory: I think Michiru-san's having flashbacks to the last > review. > Michiru: [flushed] Gomen! Erika: BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!! Karin: Yeah! Which is why we're here a *second* time! Right, Tory-san? ^.~ > >The reason I'm doing this is because > >the fic's creator bashed me and this review to hell and > >back > [All gasping] > Hotaru: No, actually she was only giving you a taste of > your own medicine as a lesson. > Haruka: Besides, she bashed first! Calling Mo-chan an > imposter. > Moshi: [outside] @!$$&% @!#$@ @!$% > Makoto: [outside] *WHAM* > Hoshi: Basically calling the fic 'dumb, but good' > Mamoru: And paying attention to the tiny things instead > of the basic idea. > Tory: You guys are good! > Setsuna: You learn stuff by hanging near the theater. Erika: Oh, but don't think that Willow *cares* if you flame her, or anything! **laugh** Kristie: It's amazing how much people will contradict themselves - all in the same sentence (or paragraph). Karin: **raises eyebrow at Kristie** Oh, and you're innocent of this? Kristie: **blush** shutup. > >(unnecessarily, might I add, because I did NOT bash > >her fic at all, just nitpicked, > All: Ano... o.O > Hoshi: If PSE had hair, it'll be bald by now from all > the nitpicking that went on. > Tory: Just how it was unnecessary to focus on a fanfiction's > gallery when it clearly states that the site is about > fiction not art. All: **bust up laughing** Erika: Oh, is *that* what that was!? :..D Karin: Sounded like bashing to me! Trina: I don't remember Tory-san ever saying Willow bashed her... just nitpicked. Kristie: O.o eh? ... I think that's right, actually... now that I think about it. Erika: Gee, Kre-chan, new experience? Kristie: >:P > >and I admit I did this more > >than I should have). > Hoshi: Good save. I guess that means the lightning bolt > won't strike. > Mamoru: Damn. > Tory: *WHACK* *WHACK* > Both: HEY! Karin: Well, at least she admitted her guilt - even though she did try to water it down. Erika: **nod** > >Which I am actually thanking her for > >because it made me realize the errors in my reviewing style > >and that I focused too much on the little things than I > >did on the big picture. > Hotaru: Thus was her true goal in the response. > Tory: Didn't feel too nice did it? > Haruka: I guess not! > Setsuna: Now had there been an email address, all of this > wouldn't have taken place. > Tory: Remind me to take Setsuna-san's key away again. > Setsuna: O.O Kristie: And yet she continues to use this "review style," complete with mistakes up the wazoo. Erika: **to Karin** You got the muzzle, right? Karin: **holds it up** Yep. > >Site: Project: Sailor Earth > Moshi: [outside] THAT'S MEEEEEE! > Hoshi: Quiet you! All: :) > >Site's Creator: Tory Brown > [They look at Tory] > Tory: What?! > Haruka: Just checking... Karin: **watching group up front** **giggle** > >Reviewer: Willow, in the form of Sailors Lilith and Solar > Mamoru: The schizophrenic Senshi. > Haruka: You or Moshi-chan are the *last* people to call anyone > schizophrenic. > Mamoru: **sweatdrop** Erika: Eh-HEE!! Sailor Virtual here! Karin: AND Questionable! E,K: And we're here to rip... **clap** YOU UP! Tory: [turns around in seat and points menacingly towards back of room] So help me, if I hear that again....!! Kristie: **with hands clamped over Erika and Karin's mouths** Sorry!! ^^; > >Lilith: Hi. We're back. > Hotaru: And there was much rejoicing. > All: [deadpan] Yatta... Karin: ACK! NOOOO!!! Erika: **Monty Python impression** Run away! Run away!! Kristie: -.-; Hoshi: Will you two shut up!? E,K: **chorus** Sorry! > >Solar: Apparently our last review was too nitpicky so now > >Will is revising it yet again. > Tory: You mean there was another version before the > first one!? > Haruka: It probably just called you a bitch and said > go to jigoku. > Tory: Thanks for making me feel better, Haruka-san. > Haruka: Anytime, Tory! Kristie: **busts up laughing** Trina: What was funny about that? Karin: **grinning** I think she's laughing at the group up front. > >Lilith: Okay, first impressions. But we can't really do > >that since this isn't the first time we've seen the site, > >so we'll do...second impressions. If there is such a thing. > Setsuna: There is, but it's hard to change the first. > Hotaru: Setsuna-mama, that had too much hidden meaning. > Setsuna: I'm supposed to be the cryptic one. Let me > enjoy it. > Hoshi: Oh boy, she's been near the espresso machine, > hasn't she? > Haruka: Yep. Erika: But let's ramble a bit more before we finally get to the point. Karin: No kidding. That intro was a snore-and-a-half. Trina: Yeah, that was pretty stupid. Kristie: Wasn't there a deodorant commercial a while back-- Erika: **interrupting** NO!! Kristie: O.o; > >Solar: And if not, there should be. Okay then, second > >impressions. Ehm...the text runs into the border background. > >Use pixels and not percentages in the table widths. > Tory: WHAT?! > Hotaru: [fires up Setsuna's laptop] Uh, no it's not. > Michiru: That is, unless she has a huge screen! > Haruka: Besides! PSE is for 640 X 800! Not 1025 X 768! > Hoshi: Why's Ami coming in here?! Erika: This chick's computer is *so* screwed over if she's actually seeing that. Karin: What, you think she's hallucinating it? Erika: **shrug** s'possible. Karin: **disgusted snort** > [Ami walks in with her glassess on.] > Mamoru: Go ahead, Ami-chan. > Ami: [clears throat] You use percentages to set up your > page to look right on ALL resolutions! You use table pixels > ONLY if your confident that NO ONE will be looking at > your page unless they have the same resolution you do. > [Short silence] > Tory: Who told you that? > Ami: Kristie-san! > [Ami leaves] Kristie: **flushes deep red** O.O; Uuuhhh.... E,K,T: **snickering** Kristie: Well, I didn't think I'd actually be quoted on it, okay? Especially by Ami! E,K,T: **giggling** Kristie: -.-;; E,K,T: **full blown laughter** > >Lilith: The picture, to paraphrase Ferio from the last > >review, is edited, but it's nice. > Tory: Kristie does great pics! It was hard trying to find > pics that could show Moshi's super fuku. > Haruka: But that's Manga mixing! > Tory: And!? I'm the author! > [lightning flashes and thunder rumbles] > Hotaru: If you say so! Kristie: **uses the Force to amplify voice** Damn right! Erika: **grabs muzzle from Karin** Okay, how's this thing work? Karin: Quick! Before she thinks she has a lightsaber! E,K,T: **quickly muzzle Kristie and bind hands with a licorice rope** Kristie: mrrfff mmmffff... MRRRRRRFFFFFFFFFFF!!!!! Erika: Your mind tricks won't work on us, young Jedi. Kristie: -.- mrrfff... Trina: **sigh** Much better. Kristie: O.o; **whimper** > >Solar: I like her hair. And I wish I had a fuku like that. > Mamoru: Go ahead, Tory. > Tory: ENVY ME! ALL SHALL ENVY ME!!! > Moshi: [outside] You mean, ENVY ME! ALL WILL ENVY ME! > Hoshi: I see Setsuna-san wasn't the only one near the > espresso machine. > Haruka: They're both nuts. Kristie: **tries to preen, but is rather unsuccessful in current situation** Erika: Oh, knock it off. Karin: No kidding - Tory-san's the one who designed it. You just followed her directions. Kristie: **slumps and pouts** > >Lilith: Okay, now on to the profile. BTW, it should actually > >be "Purojekuto: Seeraa Aasu miitos za Sutaaraito Senshi"... > Tory: Simple typo, but thanks for alerting me to it. > Haruka: It is correct in the Story though. > Michiru: Although, the A in Seera is often shown as > just one. It depends on the person writing it. > Some say Seera others say Sera, some say Seeraa. > Mamoru: Now that was a nitpick. Erika: **starts trying to say title with correct Japanese accent** Staar-ite-uh sen-shee... Karin: Oh give it up. **giggle** Trina: Yeah, your German accent makes it sound really strange. Erika: -.-; Thanks. > >Solar: But that's a nitpick! And we're not allowed to do that > >so stop it. > Hotaru: Geez, that wasn't a nitpick! > Mamoru: I think they're confusing Nitpicking and C & C > Setsuna: Or they were just being sarcastic. Erika: **thwacks Karin upside the head** Yeah, stop it! Karin: **evil glare** Kristie: **giggling** > >Lilith: Okay...sorry. *hides* > >Solar: *highlights the text* Again, it's running into the > >border. > Tory: Only if you have a mammoth of a screen. > Mamoru: This little 14 Tory has works fine. Kristie: MRRFFFF MMMMFFFF MMMFFFF MMMRRRRFFFFFFF!!!! Michiru: [turns around] What? Karin: She has a 14 inch screen too. Trina: And it looks fine. Setsuna: **nod** Haruka: [turns around and promptly laughs] What did you do to her!? Erika: Nothing she didn't deserve... ^.^ Kristie: -.- mrrffff... > >Lilith: Relations to the other senshi. That's good. And as > >Willow knows it helps in writing too. > Tory: Which is why it's there! > Michiru: Somehow, Tory gets a little confused with us Outers. > Tory: You guys scare me! Karin: Huh. Guess we wouldn't know about that. Kristie: **sweatdrop** **shakes head** > >Solar: She's a good character, and wowee, she actually has > >flaws, unlike some other Sailor Earths. > Mamoru: Flaws?! Compared to other SE's Midget's screwed up! > Tory: Moshi's cute, but dysfunctional. Just like her big brother > Others: [snickering at Mamoru's red face] Erika: Ain't it interesting how flaws make all the difference? Karin: Yeah, news flash there. Trina: Perfect senshi are stupid. Moshi's flaws give her charm. E,K: Exactly. > >Lilith: I guess it's easier to create a developed character > >when you only have to make one. > Hoshi: And what the hell am I? Chopped liver. > Moshi: [outside] Cute chopped liver... > Hoshi: **sweatdrops** All: **sweatdrop** Karin: Since when did the rest of the cast die? > >Solar: I bet it would be... > Tory: Well actually, Moshi's not the only character. > I've got Hoshi here. Shi-chan, Mi-chan and a host of > others to deal with. Moshi's just the focus! Erika: **assuming SVirtual mode** Yeah... **nods thoughfully and pretends to chomp on gum** K,K,T: **giggle** > >Willow: Which I know nothing about because I've had to create > >somewhere in the vicinity of 30 for my various stories and > >fanfictions... > Hoshi: Isn't that overkill? > Haruka: For a Senshi storyline. Yes. > Michiru: By that stage, they're all cardboard cutouts! Kristie: Mmmmfff?? O.o Erika: No kidding! Thirty!? Trina: Why!? Karin: Why would you do that to yourself? And on purpose? **shakes head** > >Lilith: Uh...yeah. > >Solar: Go take your herbal remedies, Riv. *Willow leaves* > >Thank you! Now on to the stories. > >Lilith: It's been a year or so since we last read this fic, > >hasn't it? > Tory: The ARC's are BETTER! > Mamoru: Down, Tory! Erika: So, did they re-read it, or just re-review it? Karin: Probably just re-reviewed it. Trina: Chickens. E,K: :D > >Solar: I think so. Anyway, one thing I noticed is the use of > >Japanese words. I understand it and all, 'cause Willow took a > >semester of Japanese classes, but people who haven't been in > >the anime community for too long won't. > Michiru: Which is why there are translations at the bottom, ne. > Tory: Correct! Karin: **assumes SQ mode** So, we're, like, experts now! Eh-HEE! Kristie: **whine** Erika: **takes pity** Alright, alright... I know what you want to say... **removes muzzle** Kristie: **deep breath** Thanks. :) Yeah, um, I worked with a woman last week who was in Japan for 5 years, and took language classes the whole time. She only knew 1300 Hiragana by the time she left, and was only partially fluent. So, for Willow to go proclaiming that she knows better because of one semester...? I don't think so! All: **pause** Erika: Y'done? Kristie: **eyes Erika warily** yeeaaaahh... Erika: Muzzle goes back on. Kristie: **puppy dog eyes** Karin: Sorry, but it's for your own good. Kristie: **pouts** I have the Force... Trina: **mock voice** And we're scared. Kristie: O.o;; > >Lilith: Which is why there are translations at the bottom, see? > [Everyone looks at Michiru] > Setsuna: I thought I predicted the future here. > Michiru: I need to quit hanging with you! Erika: These phrases and words aren't hard to pick up, though. Karin: Yeah, but Kre-chan needed them too, at first, remember? Erika: **nods** True. > >Solar: Yes, but I would suggest putting them at the top, or > >just whenever a Japanese word is used put its translation in > >parentheses. > Tory: yes, next time Usagi does her intro, I'll just stop > the story and put (for love and blah blah blah) > Mamoru: *BAM* Don't you start! > Tory: Ouchie! Okay! Trina: Putting them at the bottom is fine with me! Karin: Yeah, I think they're distracting in the middle of the story. Trina: Me too. > >Lilith: The suffixes are okay, those actually sometimes add > >a lot to the story as they show the relationships between > >characters. > All: [nods] > Tory: Also those close to Moshi call her Mo-chan! > Mamoru: I prefer Midget. Erika: Uh, DUH!!!! Karin: **giggle** Yeah, since we're all SO ignorant about the suffix thing. Trina: I remember hearing that a long time ago! Erika: Yeah, I think that's something we're all taught at one point or another - for absolutely no reason. K,K,T: **laugh** > >Solar: But when it's whole phrases like "Kami-sama, onegai mamo > >Moshi" (not correct Japanese grammar either, as far as I know, > >cos the verb goes at the end and the conjugation is dodgy) it's > >distracting. > Hoshi: Boku wa Tenchino Hoshi. > Mamoru: *WHAM* > Hoshi: OUCH! > Mamoru: That was distracting! Karin: What does "cos" mean? Erika: Don't you start now... Trina: What does "Kami-sama, onegai mamo Moshi" mean? Karin: **shrug** Beats me. Erika: Maybe there's a translation at the bottom... Kristie: **knocks Erika with her shoulder** -.- mrrrffff... > >Lilith: But it's a great fic, really. Very well written, > >and the plot is excellent. Original too. > All: oooooh! > Tory: [starts beaming] Erika: Y'know, I'm still not seeing any redemption here! Karin: No kidding! She's still picking apart the same things she did the first time - just more nicely. Erika: Yeah... this whole thing just sounds very... fake to me. But of course, that's MY opinion! Kristie: **giggle** > >Solar: Moshi is a very dynamic character, which is good > >especially compared to Willow's static ones... > Haruka: That and she's dysfunctional. > Moshi: [wailing outside] HARUKA-SAN! Trina: Hehe. Takes a lot to bash your own characters. :D Erika: At least she's seen them for what they are. ^.^ > >Willow: *seethes in the background* > Hoshi: Oh dear, her head's gonna explode! > All: EWWW! HOSHI! All: **bust up laughing at Hoshi's comment** > >Lilith: I especially liked Moshi's occasional "identity > >crisis" moments, such as when she turned into Mosite and > >when she thought she was Rei. > >Solar: So it's an excellent fanfic, really it is, just the > >Japanese and stuff. > Setsuna: What? Just the Japanese and Stuff?! What stuff!? > Michiru: [sneaks Setsuna's cup away] > Haruka: Just stuff. Deal with it, Setsuna. > Setsuna: Oh shut up. Karin: Oh look! We're back to the infamous "n'stuff" comment! Trina: I second Setsuna! Erika: Why is it so hard for this girl to be specific about anything? > >Lilith: And the timeline seems a bit off, but maybe that's > >just me. > Tory: Calm yourself, I'm rewritting it! Erika: Proof that they didn't re-read it. Tory-san has it pasted all over the place that she's rewriting it to fix those discrepancies. Karin: **nods** That she does. > >Solar: But I think she said it's being rewritten to correct > >the timeline errors, which will be good. > [Everyone looks at Tory] > Tory: Minor coincidence! All: **snort** > >Lilith: Yeah. Okay, now what do we have to do...pictures? > All: ARGH! NOT THE GALLERY! > Tory: I'm seriously considering removing that part! Kristie: **rolls eyes heaven-wards** mmmrrrffff... Karin: **wry look** She just couldn't resist, could she? Erika: **calls up to front** Don't take it out, Tory-san! Willow's just an idiot! > >Solar: Sure, why not. Most of them are edited, some drawn > >though. I like the pop-up boxes. Very convenient and a nice > >touch. > >Lilith: Some of the pictures are sloppily edited, though the > >pictures the author drew aren't bad. > Tory: Mine? Aren't bad?! A three toed sloth could draw better! > Michiru: Stop being hard of yourself! All: **giggling** Trina: What's a three-toed sloth? Karin: **whips out a National Geographic** Here... > >Solar: Kristie Green's pics...wow. Great coloring and shading. > Mamoru: Oh no. Kristie's head's gonna implode at this! Kristie: **preens like mad** Erika: Oh WHY!?? Did she REALLY have to say that!? It's not like she's insufferable enough! K, T: **laughing at Kristie** Trina: She looks so... stupid... with that muzzle on! :D Kristie: **deflated** -.- hrrmmff > >Lilith: Is anybody ever gonna review the Starlight Senshi? > >Willow: Eventually...I'm getting to it. > Tory: I hope that it's not nitpicked over as well. I'm *mild* > compared to Kristie-san. All: **riotous laughter** Kristie: **laughs evilly as best she can with muzzle on** > All: [starts shuddering in fear] > Haruka: I haven't felt that scared since facing Galaxia! > Hotaru: Don't remind me! Kristie: **barely able to move mouth** Hey, Mmm not that mbad, mm I? All in theater: **knowing glance** Kristie: oh. > >Lilith: Okay. Anyway, pictures good. Now, overall. > >Solar: We think it's good. > >Lilith: I think it's better than our fanfic. I'm jealous. > All: Oooooh?! > Hotaru: Freud slip? > Mamoru: o.O;; Erika: Teehee!! Karin: Revenge is sweet, eh Tory-san? ^.~ > >Willow: *continues to seethe* > >Solar: Uh, we better wrap it up before she explodes or > >something. Anyway, we think this is a very, very good fic. > >Okay? Happy now? > Tory: Hmm. Should I be happy? > Hotaru: Well, they didn't nitpick. > Hoshi: But that last part sounds a tad snippish. > Setsuna: A few parts sound a bit snippish. > Mamoru: But I think that's as close to apology you're gonna get. > Tory: Well, I tried! Erika: Well, no, not really. Karin: TRY BEING SINCERE NEXT TIME!! Trina: Or even just doing it right next time. > >Lilith: And we rate it a 2. > All: What's a 2?! Erika: **SVirtual mode** See, it's this number that-- Tory: Didn't I warn you once!?? Erika: **thoroughly cowed** Sorry... > >Solar: I think we need to change this rating system... > >Lilith: Anyway, uh...bye! Hope this was an improvement! > Tory: It was better than the last one! THAT'S how a review > should be done! > Hotaru: I think her head's swelling too. > Tory: Quiet you. Karin: uh... Sorta! :P Trina: Should we take the muzzle off now? Erika: **raises an eyebrow as she studies Kristie** No... I like her that way. Kristie: Mmmmrrrrfffff!? O.O;; Karin: Yeah, it's kinda nice to know that you have a voice, Trina. ^.^ Trina: Thanks!