Tory: Okay! All Inner Senshi get out! Inners: NANI?! Tory: You guys had the first response, now it's the Outers turn. [The Inners, Usagi, Ami, Rei, Minako, Makoto & Moshi leave The Outers, Setsuna, Haruka, Michiru and Hotaru enter with Mamoru and Hoshi following.] Hoshi: [yelling back] Well, you don't have to push! Tory: Uh, Hoshi? Hoshi: Yeah? Tory: You're not a Senshi. Hoshi: I know that, but she pushed me in here! [jerks thumb to outside] Tory: Fine, just have a seat and lets get started. [Everyone sits down mumbling] >Disclaimer:These opinions are the opinions of SailorRiven >(that would be me, Willow), and if you have a problem with >this review, deal with it. Mamoru: Gee, that's so helpful! Setsuna: This is highly illogical. Haruka: Can the Dr. Spock act, Setsuna! Setsuna: [glares] The purpose of a review is to assist a writer in making their story better. Not ripping it apart and then telling them to *deal* with it. Tory: [to Michiru] Is she always like this? Michiru: If someone gets her dander up, yes. Hotaru: Be lucky she's not transformed. She'd would've took the theater out already. Hoshi: [sighing] What have I mixed myself up with? >No really, feel free to >flame me, Rei: [outside] MUHAHAHAR! Usagi: [outside] REI-CHAN, NO! Tory: Besides, it'll be kinda hard to do with no email address. Setsuna: [whips out laptop] Give me ten minutes. Michiru: [takes laptop away] No, Setsuna. No evil time bombs. Setsuna: Drat. Hoshi: Setsuna-san's scaring me. Hotaru: Again, be happy she's not transformed. Hoshi: o.O;; >but don't think I actually care. Mamoru: But you care enough to do another review? Ne? Michiru: Did she ever email you? Tory: hmm.. Nope! And I usually keep most mail on my Yahoo account. >These are my >opinions, I'm not trying to force them on anyone, they're >just my opinions. Mamoru: As are these mine. As are these mine. >You don't have to have the same opinions, if you do that's >cool, if you don't that's cool too, but don't be flaming me. Michiru: But didn't she say, go ahead, flame me? Setsuna: Yes. [eyebrow twitch] Haruka: But here she says, don't be flaming me! >Actually, scratch that: do flame me if you feel so inclined, >but I won't mind. Tory: I think Michiru-san's having flashbacks to the last review. Michiru: [flushed] Gomen! >The reason I'm doing this is because >the fic's creator bashed me and this review to hell and >back [All gasping] Hotaru: No, actually she was only giving you a taste of your own medicine as a lesson. Haruka: Besides, she bashed first! Calling Mo-chan an imposter. Moshi: [outside] @!$$&% @!#$@ @!$% Makoto: [outside] *WHAM* Hoshi: Basically calling the fic 'dumb, but good' Mamoru: And paying attention to the tiny things instead of the basic idea. Tory: You guys are good! Setsuna: You learn stuff by hanging near the theater. >(unnecessarily, might I add, because I did NOT bash >her fic at all, just nitpicked, All: Ano... o.O Hoshi: If PSE had hair, it'll be bald by now from all the nitpicking that went on. Tory: Just how it was unnecessary to focus on a fanfiction's gallery when it clearly states that the site is about fiction not art. >and I admit I did this more >than I should have). Hoshi: Good save. I guess that means the lightning bolt won't strike. Mamoru: Damn. Tory: *WHACK* *WHACK* Both: HEY! >Which I am actually thanking her for >because it made me realize the errors in my reviewing style >and that I focused too much on the little things than I >did on the big picture. Hotaru: Thus was her true goal in the response. Tory: Didn't feel too nice did it? Haruka: I guess not! Setsuna: Now had there been an email address, all of this wouldn't have taken place. Tory: Remind me to take Setsuna-san's key away again. Setsuna: O.O >Site: Project: Sailor Earth > Moshi: [outside] THAT'S MEEEEEE! Hoshi: Quiet you! >Site's Creator: Tory Brown > [They look at Tory] Tory: What?! Haruka: Just checking... >Reviewer: Willow, in the form of Sailors Lilith and Solar > Mamoru: The schizophrenic Senshi. Haruka: You or Moshi-chan are the *last* people to call anyone schizophrenic. Mamoru: **sweatdrop** >Lilith: Hi. We're back. > Hotaru: And there was much rejoicing. All: [deadpan] Yatta... >Solar: Apparently our last review was too nitpicky so now >Will is revising it yet again. > Tory: You mean there was another version before the first one!? Haruka: It probably just called you a bitch and said go to jigoku. Tory: Thanks for making me feel better, Haruka-san. Haruka: Anytime, Tory! >Lilith: Okay, first impressions. But we can't really do >that since this isn't the first time we've seen the site, >so we'll do...second impressions. If there is such a thing. > Setsuna: There is, but it's hard to change the first. Hotaru: Setsuna-mama, that had too much hidden meaning. Setsuna: I'm supposed to be the cryptic one. Let me enjoy it. Hoshi: Oh boy, she's been near the espresso machine, hasn't she? Haruka: Yep. >Solar: And if not, there should be. Okay then, second >impressions. Ehm...the text runs into the border background. >Use pixels and not percentages in the table widths. > Tory: WHAT?! Hotaru: [fires up Setsuna's laptop] Uh, no it's not. Michiru: That is, unless she has a huge screen! Haruka: Besides! PSE is for 640 X 800! Not 1025 X 768! Hoshi: Why's Ami coming in here?! [Ami walks in with her glassess on.] Mamoru: Go ahead, Ami-chan. Ami: [clears throat] You use percentages to set up your page to look right on ALL resolutions! You use table pixels ONLY if your confident that NO ONE will be looking at your page unless they have the same resolution you do. [Short silence] Tory: Who told you that? Ami: Kristie-san! [Ami leaves] >Lilith: The picture, to paraphrase Ferio from the last >review, is edited, but it's nice. > Tory: Kristie does great pics! It was hard trying to find pics that could show Moshi's super fuku. Haruka: But that's Manga mixing! Tory: And!? I'm the author! [lightning flashes and thunder rumbles] Hotaru: If you say so! >Solar: I like her hair. And I wish I had a fuku like that. > Mamoru: Go ahead, Tory. Tory: ENVY ME! ALL SHALL ENVY ME!!! Moshi: [outside] You mean, ENVY ME! ALL WILL ENVY ME! Hoshi: I see Setsuna-san wasn't the only one near the espresso machine. Haruka: They're both nuts. >Lilith: Okay, now on to the profile. BTW, it should actually >be "Purojekuto: Seeraa Aasu miitos za Sutaaraito Senshi"... > Tory: Simple typo, but thanks for alerting me to it. Haruka: It is correct in the Story though. Michiru: Although, the A in Seera is often shown as just one. It depends on the person writing it. Some say Seera others say Sera, some say Seeraa. Mamoru: Now that was a nitpick. >Solar: But that's a nitpick! And we're not allowed to do that >so stop it. > Hotaru: Geez, that wasn't a nitpick! Mamoru: I think they're confusing Nitpicking and C & C Setsuna: Or they were just being sarcastic. >Lilith: Okay...sorry. *hides* > >Solar: *highlights the text* Again, it's running into the >border. > Tory: Only if you have a mammoth of a screen. Mamoru: This little 14 Tory has works fine. >Lilith: Relations to the other senshi. That's good. And as >Willow knows it helps in writing too. > Tory: Which is why it's there! Michiru: Somehow, Tory gets a little confused with us Outers. Tory: You guys scare me! >Solar: She's a good character, and wowee, she actually has >flaws, unlike some other Sailor Earths. > Mamoru: Flaws?! Compared to other SE's Midget's screwed up! Tory: Moshi's cute, but dysfunctional. Just like her big brother Others: [snickering at Mamoru's red face] >Lilith: I guess it's easier to create a developed character >when you only have to make one. > Hoshi: And what the hell am I? Chopped liver. Moshi: [outside] Cute chopped liver... Hoshi: **sweatdrops** >Solar: I bet it would be... > Tory: Well actually, Moshi's not the only character. I've got Hoshi here. Shi-chan, Mi-chan and a host of others to deal with. Moshi's just the focus! >Willow: Which I know nothing about because I've had to create >somewhere in the vicinity of 30 for my various stories and >fanfictions... > Hoshi: Isn't that overkill? Haruka: For a Senshi storyline. Yes. Michiru: By that stage, they're all cardboard cutouts! >Lilith: Uh...yeah. > >Solar: Go take your herbal remedies, Riv. *Willow leaves* >Thank you! Now on to the stories. > >Lilith: It's been a year or so since we last read this fic, >hasn't it? > Tory: The ARC's are BETTER! Mamoru: Down, Tory! >Solar: I think so. Anyway, one thing I noticed is the use of >Japanese words. I understand it and all, 'cause Willow took a >semester of Japanese classes, but people who haven't been in >the anime community for too long won't. > Michiru: Which is why there are translations at the bottom, ne. Tory: Correct! >Lilith: Which is why there are translations at the bottom, see? > [Everyone looks at Michiru] Setsuna: I thought I predicted the future here. Michiru: I need to quit hanging with you! >Solar: Yes, but I would suggest putting them at the top, or >just whenever a Japanese word is used put its translation in >parentheses. > Tory: yes, next time Usagi does her intro, I'll just stop the story and put (for love and blah blah blah) Mamoru: *BAM* Don't you start! Tory: Ouchie! Okay! >Lilith: The suffixes are okay, those actually sometimes add >a lot to the story as they show the relationships between >characters. > All: [nods] Tory: Also those close to Moshi call her Mo-chan! Mamoru: I prefer Midget. >Solar: But when it's whole phrases like "Kami-sama, onegai mamo >Moshi" (not correct Japanese grammar either, as far as I know, >cos the verb goes at the end and the conjugation is dodgy) it's >distracting. > Hoshi: Boku wa Tenchino Hoshi. Mamoru: *WHAM* Hoshi: OUCH! Mamoru: That was distracting! >Lilith: But it's a great fic, really. Very well written, >and the plot is excellent. Original too. > All: oooooh! Tory: [starts beaming] >Solar: Moshi is a very dynamic character, which is good >especially compared to Willow's static ones... > Haruka: That and she's dysfunctional. Moshi: [wailing outside] HARUKA-SAN! >Willow: *seethes in the background* > Hoshi: Oh dear, her head's gonna explode! All: EWWW! HOSHI! >Lilith: I especially liked Moshi's occasional "identity >crisis" moments, such as when she turned into Mosite and >when she thought she was Rei. > >Solar: So it's an excellent fanfic, really it is, just the >Japanese and stuff. > Setsuna: What? Just the Japanese and Stuff?! What stuff!? Michiru: [sneaks Setsuna's cup away] Haruka: Just stuff. Deal with it, Setsuna. Setsuna: Oh shut up. >Lilith: And the timeline seems a bit off, but maybe that's >just me. > Tory: Calm yourself, I'm rewritting it! >Solar: But I think she said it's being rewritten to correct >the timeline errors, which will be good. > [Everyone looks at Tory] Tory: Minor coincidence! >Lilith: Yeah. Okay, now what do we have to do...pictures? > All: ARGH! NOT THE GALLERY! Tory: I'm seriously considering removing that part! >Solar: Sure, why not. Most of them are edited, some drawn >though. I like the pop-up boxes. Very convenient and a nice >touch. > >Lilith: Some of the pictures are sloppily edited, though the >pictures the author drew aren't bad. > Tory: Mine? Aren't bad?! A three toed sloth could draw better! Michiru: Stop being hard of yourself! >Solar: Kristie Green's pics...wow. Great coloring and shading. > Mamoru: Oh no. Kristie's head's gonna implode at this! >Lilith: Is anybody ever gonna review the Starlight Senshi? > >Willow: Eventually...I'm getting to it. > Tory: I hope that it's not nitpicked over as well. I'm *mild* compared to Kristie-san. All: [starts shuddering in fear] Haruka: I haven't felt that scared since facing Galaxia! Hotaru: Don't remind me! >Lilith: Okay. Anyway, pictures good. Now, overall. > >Solar: We think it's good. > >Lilith: I think it's better than our fanfic. I'm jealous. > All: Oooooh?! Hotaru: Freud slip? Mamoru: o.O;; >Willow: *continues to seethe* > >Solar: Uh, we better wrap it up before she explodes or >something. Anyway, we think this is a very, very good fic. >Okay? Happy now? > Tory: Hmm. Should I be happy? Hotaru: Well, they didn't nitpick. Hoshi: But that last part sounds a tad snippish. Setsuna: A few parts sound a bit snippish. Mamoru: But I think that's as close to apology you're gonna get. Tory: Well, I tried! >Lilith: And we rate it a 2. > All: What's a 2?! >Solar: I think we need to change this rating system... > >Lilith: Anyway, uh...bye! Hope this was an improvement! Tory: It was better than the last one! THAT'S how a review should be done! Hotaru: I think her head's swelling too. Tory: Quiet you.